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> It kind of reminded me of the fall of reach from halo, with humans normally fighting rebels getting squashed by an alien threat, the knight being like a spartan.
The Halo influence is no doubt apparent, but I feel like I've done a decent enough job distinguishing my story
>I am not sure if the relation between Arlo and Xiah is forced, but I got the impression it was more of a political marriage type of situation. It lead me to assume that Arlo's reaction to her and desire to marry her was sort of just like an inexperienced teenager first getting attention from a girl, being more hormone driven.
I'm a bit hesitant to state exactly whether something is intended or not as some things are better left to interpretation or will be answered by the story itself in later chapters
>In my opinion, chapter 3 was probably the weakest of the bunch
I think the issue is I tried to do too much in one chapter. In future revisions, I'll try to better set up the council being corrupt/incompetent early on
>If the meebs are supposed to be like a servant race, why was Myra allowed to be so flippant?
The answer to this is multi faceted so I'll only say the non-spoiler part. Meebs are split into castes, workers, adjutants, drones, and queens. Myra is an adjutant which are smarter and taller than the workers like Siv so they are treated more favorably. Not to the same degree as a node, but still a bit higher up the totem pole. She has some traits that make her a valuable asset to the queens which you'll see later on
>Also, just a general question - so the riots presumably broke out because the queens had been gone for 20 cycles/years, did the common people (as the preacher was saying) revolt because they perceived the government to be going against the queens, or did the commoners lose faith? The queens leading the dissidents into the council makes me think they were revolting because they believed the council had gone astray, but it didn't seem entirely clear to me.
Same as I said before, the council is rather incompetent/corrupt in the absence of the queens and I will make that more clear
>I will try to keep up with this story more closely and look forward to more chapters
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